Help needed - this week's "big" article

I'm not really into writing today, and I'm really labouring through this. It really sucks - anyone care to point out the crap for me? Anything would be great.

They'll be some typos and grammar fuck ups to as I have not fully proofed it yet. So bear with me.


Last week, Dale Skorobach, of Port Moody, made his first trip to Princeton, but on paper he’d been living here for over six months. In August last year, Skorobach was camping near Fort Langley when a man and woman approached him saying they were victims of one of the numerous BC forest fires. The man had a bandaged arm, which he claimed had been burned during the fire.
Claiming he had no money, and nowhere to stay, the man asked Skorobach if he could camp next to his site. Skorobach agreed.
“We felt sorry for them, they seemed like they’d been through a bad time,” says Skorobach. “So we said they could stay there and the next day we got to know them and things like that. They were company.”
After Skorobach and the couple parted company, a six-month roller coaster of missing money, out of town phone bills, and other credit problems began to arise for Skorobach. After months of trying to figure out the reason for the problems, he got a clue. During a phone conversation, his line was disconnected and when he called Telus to investigate he was told he hadn’t paid his bill in Princeton, so all lines in his name were cut off.
Once Skorobach had a lead he phoned the store where his alter ego worked.
“I asked him if I was talking to Dale and he asked ‘who is this?’ I said ‘it’s the real Dale Skorobach you so and so. I told him I was going to be coming up there. Then he ran to the cops and said I had threatened his life.”
Upon arrival in Princeton Skorobach discovered the man had run up credit in his name all over town. He even walked into a local pub and asked, “is Dale Skorobach in here?” The bartender answered, “He’s not allowed to drink in here, he hasn’t paid his tab.”
As well, the identity thief had managed employment at a local mill, Skorobach says he went to visit and in the lunchroom he found Dale Skorobach owed money to every person there, except the one who replaced the thief after he was fired.
“It’s been so exhausting,” says Skorobach. “This has almost destroyed my life.”
Skorobach says the missing money almost broke up his marriage because he and his wife had only been married for about a year so when the money went missing they were both looking at each other with skepticism.
The thief also filed taxes in Skorobach’s name, which prevented him from being able to work this year. His wife, an American citizen is at risk of being deported with her children because they don’t have the money to file for proper documents to remain in Canada. On top of that is the seemingly endless trail of credit card bills, store credit, and utility bills outstanding in Skorobach’s name. All together, Skorobach thinks the suspect may have committed up to $100,000 in fraud under his false identity.
“He also took another man in town for $3,000,” says Skorobach. “This guy belongs six feet underground.”
The thief obtained information about Skorobach from a stolen cell-phone application, which contained his credit info, address, and driver’s license number. From there the thief set up the phony credit cards, tax information, and credit applications.
“We still aren’t sure what’s going to happen with all of this,” says Skorobach. “Right now we’re still waiting to find out more.”
Princeton RCMP say they have arrested the suspect, but will not release names at this time due to an ongoing investigation.

... be sure to say "numerous BC forest fires."

It almost might be helpful to add some statistical info on the status of identity theft as a crime, either in Canada or the US, or both. Getting worse, getting better, etc. A few statistics to go along with the human interest side, maybe some advisories on how to prevent identity theft.

In the US:

http://www.privacyrights.org/identity.htm

http://www.idtheftcenter.org/index.shtml

Cheers.

Dale Skorobach of Port Moody made his first trip to Princeton last week, but on paper he’d been living here for over six months.

In August of last year, Skorobach was camping near Fort Langley when a man and woman approached him saying they were victims of one of the numerous BC forest fires. The man had a bandaged arm, which he said had been burned during the fire. Claiming he had no money, and nowhere to stay, the man asked Skorobach if he could camp next to his site. Skorobach agreed.

“We felt sorry for them, they seemed like they’d been through a bad time,” says Skorobach. “So we said they could stay there and the next day we got to know them and things like that. They were company.”

After Skorobach and the couple parted company, a six-month roller coaster of missing money, out of town phone bills, and other credit problems began to arise for Skorobach. After months of trying to figure out the reason for the problems, he got a clue. During a phone conversation, his line was disconnected. When he called Telus to investigate he was told he hadn’t paid his bill in Princeton, so all lines in his name were cut off.
Now Skorobach had a lead and after some investigating, phoned the store where his alter ego worked.

“I asked him if I was talking to Dale and he asked ‘who is this?’ I said “‘it’s the real Dale Skorobach, you so and so.” I told him I was going to be coming up there. Then he ran to the cops and said I had threatened his life.”

Upon arrival in Princeton Skorobach discovered the man had run up credit in his name all over town. He walked into a local pub and asked, “is Dale Skorobach in here?” The bartender answered, “He’s not allowed to drink in here, he hasn’t paid his tab.”

Too, the identity thief had managed employment at a local mill, Skorobach says he went to visit and in the lunchroom he found Dale Skorobach owed money to every person there, except the one who replaced the thief after he was fired.

“It’s been so exhausting,” says Skorobach. “This has almost destroyed my life.”
Skorobach says the missing money almost broke up his marriage because he and his wife had only been married for about a year so when the money went missing they were both looking at each other with scepticism.

The thief has even filed taxes in Skorobach’s name, which prevented him from being able to work this year. His wife, an American citizen is at risk of being deported with her children because they don’t have the money to file for proper documents to remain in Canada. On top of that is the seemingly endless trail of credit card bills, store credit, and utility bills outstanding in Skorobach’s name. All together, Skorobach thinks the suspect may have committed up to $100,000 in fraud under his false identity.

“He also took another man in town for $3,000,” says Skorobach. “This guy belongs six feet underground.”

The thief obtained information about Skorobach from a stolen cell-phone application, which contained his credit info, address, and driver’s license number. From there the thief set up the phony credit cards, tax information, and credit applications.

“We still aren’t sure what’s going to happen with all of this,” says Skorobach. “Right now we’re still waiting to find out more.”

Princeton RCMP say they have arrested the suspect, but will not release names at this time due to an ongoing investigation.

:hi:

Wouldn't suprise me, it's just not coming easy today.

Mostly good. You've spelt scepticism wrong, - I fixed it. You had too many clauses in apposition in the opening sentence. I've fixed it. You overused a phrase or two, I've fixed those.

I hadn't actually read what you posted, I'll take a look. Thanks

it was a good read

I actually added some since posting it too