I used to love language. - Democratic Underground

rbnyc

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Thu Oct-16-03 09:16 PM
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I used to love language.

Edited on Thu Oct-16-03 09:17 PM by rbnyc

I think I still do, but in a raunchier way. In many ways I'm not as smart as I used to be, but even this has its gifts. For example, after reading Ted Kennedy's floor remarks tonight, these were my reflections on the Bush* Administration:

You lied.
You suck.
You're idiots.
You fucked up.
People are dying.
You're profiteers.
You screwed us.

And I thought, this is our perfect message. I want to make it into a song, a jingle. This is our freaking ad campaign. This is pretty damn clear.

EDIT: I never catch all my typos in preview!

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FloridaPat

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Thu Oct-16-03 09:22 PM
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1. Needs a beat ans a better flow. Also clean it up so children

can chant it. Good start though! Thanks

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rbnyc

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Thu Oct-16-03 09:24 PM
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2. I don't know...

Edited on Thu Oct-16-03 09:25 PM by rbnyc

...it reminds me of that George Carlin cheer. I loved that cheer he used to do when I was a kid.

"Bat shit, rat shit, dirty old twat.
69 asshole tied in a knot.
Hooray! Lizard shit! Fuck!"

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Bossy Monkey

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Thu Oct-16-03 09:25 PM
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3. Wanna see my all four-letter-word poem?

Edited on Thu Oct-16-03 09:26 PM by undisclosedlocation

Tough! Here it is anyway:

Four Word Play

Noun verb list
fall from evil
epic crap rite
ripe fish myth
lack zest feel lust
grog wank then deaf
kiss paid date
fuck wary pope
good jazz fart
Deft hand
come kill
bomb womb tomb
bury fury
slay fear
dire ride
Fake king brat
nice bozo
neat liar pyre
crib baby deny
veto gaga saga
lama piss
doom poor dupe
Want pony need home
Stop that

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rbnyc

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Thu Oct-16-03 09:27 PM
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4. I love it.

Edited on Thu Oct-16-03 09:28 PM by rbnyc

I'm going to cut it up, put it in a different order, and use it for my new song.

:)

Okay, I really have to go now. My hubby is waiting for me. He thinks I want to run away with Ted Kennedy.

But I actually do really like your poem, and I love poetry enough to hate it. (EDIT: hate poetry that is, not your poem, which I love.)

Oh boy. I shouldn't have had that brownie.

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Bossy Monkey

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Fri Oct-17-03 12:00 AM
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5. Thanks! Sorry for delay; I got carried away by baseball madness

Even worse than brownies!

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