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LaraMN (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:12 PM Original message |
Constructive criticism needed. |
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billyskank (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:15 PM Response to Original message |
1. I liked it |
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LaraMN (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:20 PM Response to Reply #1 |
5. Hmmm... |
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billyskank (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 03:51 PM Response to Reply #5 |
25. You are welcome |
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Floogeldy (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:16 PM Response to Original message |
2. It's good! |
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LaraMN (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:20 PM Response to Reply #2 |
6. Thanks! |
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miss_american_pie (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:18 PM Response to Original message |
3. It's very clever |
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LaraMN (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:19 PM Response to Reply #3 |
4. Yep. I need to do that. Thanks, babe! |
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hfojvt (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:26 PM Response to Reply #3 |
8. What? No, |
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miss_american_pie (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:27 PM Response to Reply #8 |
10. Don't make me start quoting |
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hfojvt (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:03 PM Response to Reply #10 |
16. Ooh, I love quotes |
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miss_american_pie (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:05 PM Response to Reply #16 |
17. Strunk and White, maybe |
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hfojvt (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:22 PM Response to Reply #17 |
18. So do I |
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miss_american_pie (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 03:39 PM Response to Reply #18 |
24. Yes, the commas are fine |
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hfojvt (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:23 PM Response to Original message |
7. I would remove the word ketchup |
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wildhorses (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:27 PM Response to Reply #7 |
9. but if she leaves out the word ketchup the cadence will be |
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LaraMN (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:29 PM Response to Reply #7 |
11. I used hockey because my school lived and died by its hockey team. |
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hfojvt (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:58 PM Response to Reply #11 |
14. maybe some of the school resented that |
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wildhorses (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:35 PM Response to Reply #14 |
20. what about "glory days"? |
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Schema Thing (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 03:09 PM Response to Reply #20 |
22. If it was me, it would be "glory holes", but the cheers were not imaginary |
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wildhorses (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 03:17 PM Response to Reply #22 |
23. ......... |
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Schema Thing (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 05:24 PM Response to Reply #23 |
29. Thank you. Thank you. Thank you very much. I'll... |
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Schema Thing (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:30 PM Response to Reply #7 |
12. uh, why remove "ketchup"? |
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hfojvt (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 01:48 PM Response to Reply #12 |
13. as I was reading it |
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WCGreen (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:00 PM Response to Original message |
15. See there..... |
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Rabrrrrrr (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:33 PM Response to Original message |
19. I believe that one writes legislation, not legislature. |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 02:55 PM Response to Original message |
21. Your rhyming pattern needs some adjusting... |
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dpbrown (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 05:10 PM Response to Original message |
26. Take out the comma between "glory" and "to" |
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bigwillq (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 05:16 PM Response to Original message |
27. I was the Class of '96 too! |
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huskerlaw (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 05:19 PM Response to Reply #27 |
28. So was I! |
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bigwillq (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 05:26 PM Response to Reply #28 |
30. WOO HOO! |
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GalleryGod (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Mon Jun-19-06 06:23 PM Response to Original message |
31. 10th Reunion ! WoW ! You are ever so young ! |
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