The RetroLounge Daily Poem Thread (Fri 7/25/2008)

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Fri Jul-25-08 06:29 AM
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The RetroLounge Daily Poem Thread (Fri 7/25/2008)

To Be Saved You Must Be Spent

The blast from the bees' wings
is enough to knock the blossoms
from the wisteria, late spring
and the sexual clouds of pollen
are dissipating in the backyard.
The blooms' purple confetti litters
the yard, the parade gone by,
and the dogwood is dropping pieces
of a letter it's shredded,
white scraps with just a dab
of ink staining each one.
The words might have proclaimed love
or been an official notice of death.
All that can be said for sure
is that the blue torque of the sky
has tightened.

Michael Chitwood

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:hi:

RL

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blueraven95

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Fri Jul-25-08 10:17 AM
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1. ...

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Fri Jul-25-08 04:40 PM
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7. ...

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xchrom

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Fri Jul-25-08 10:19 AM
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2. ...

The blast from the bees' wings
is enough to knock the blossoms
from the wisteria, late spring
and the sexual clouds of pollen
are dissipating in the backyard.

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kat_kringle

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Fri Jul-25-08 10:38 AM
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3. are the bumble bees safe yet?

i know that in recent years, they've been dwindling.

which is sad, knowing that propolis can do so many things for ppl.

how are you? :hi:

"dogwood is dropping its pieces" best line because of the d-sound....alliteration or connontation? i can't remember if alliteration is a repetition of similar sound or if it's only repetition w/vowels. i could google it, but i need a cig! :bounce:

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RetroLounge

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Fri Jul-25-08 04:42 PM
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8. consonance

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Literary_consonance

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kat_kringle

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Fri Jul-25-08 11:01 AM
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4. kick b/c poetry is becoming dead to my generation... n/t

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CaliforniaPeggy

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Fri Jul-25-08 11:09 AM
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5. My dear Retro!

Wow, what cool imagery!

I love how this flows...

...the blue torque of the sky
has tightened.

Very cool!

Thanks!

:hi:

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Fri Jul-25-08 03:06 PM
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6. Kick.

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