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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:25 PM
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My newest poem, ready for prime time...Flame
Ah, your tongue is a flame
I’m glowing now
I want to be burned
By you

We will create a space
upon the grass

Where we will wrap and twist and coil

The wind might blow over us
But we’ll never feel it pass

The dark shade of the trees
Will hide us
From everyone
They’ll never see us there
They won’t see us come undone

They won’t see us completed
They won’t see us become
One.

Ah, your tongue is a flame
There will be no end to us
Or our ecstasy...
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UrbScotty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:27 PM
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1. Thank you, my dear CaliforniaPeggy!
:-)
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:29 PM
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3. My dear UrbScotty!
No, no...thank you!

:hug:
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derby378 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:29 PM
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2. Better loosen the collar a bit...
:blush:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:31 PM
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My dear derby378!
Yours? Or mine?

Thanks, sweetie...:hug:

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CreekDog Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:29 PM
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4. Beautiful
i like the imagery. :hi:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:32 PM
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9. My dear CreekDog!
Oh, thank you, sweetie...

Glad you do!

:hi:
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FarLeftRage Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:30 PM
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5. You certainly have a way with words
This kind of reminds me of e e cummings...
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:34 PM
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10. My dear FarLeftRage!
Wow, thank you!

I admire his work so damn much!

:hi:
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PBS Poll-435 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:31 PM
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6. Wow
Excellent.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:35 PM
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11. My dear PBS Poll-435!
Glad you think so!

Thank you...

:hi:
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seaker Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:32 PM
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7. You words paint a picture
evoking memories warm and lingering..Bless you :blush:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:37 PM
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12. My dear seaker!
I am so glad that my little work evokes such warm memories...

Thank you...

:hug:
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Tom Kitten Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:32 PM
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8. That is rather hot!
Peggy what's gotten into you?
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:38 PM
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13. My dear Tom Kitten!
It is rather...

What's gotten into me?

Nothing!

I'm just finding my voice...;-)
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elshiva Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:50 PM
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14. This is so sexy. It's a great poem.
I'm in love with someone now. I wish I could kiss him and feel his tongue inside me. Everyone knows who it is, so I won't say his name. :loveya:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:53 PM
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15. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, my dear elshiva...
Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:
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elshiva Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun Feb-22-09 11:54 PM
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16. Thank YOU! Really captures the mood.
:hug: :hug:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:55 AM
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17. Kick!
:kick:
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Lionel Mandrake Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 01:02 AM
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18. This poem would have warmed up the crowd
in Washington DC on January 20.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 01:14 AM
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20. My dear Lionel Mandrake!
I think you're correct...

It was a pretty cold day!

:hi:
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OmahaBlueDog Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 01:13 AM
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19. I've never seen welding described quite so vividly
Naw...just funnin'

I liked it.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 01:23 AM
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22. My dear OmahaBlueDog!
Welding?

:rofl:

You make me laugh, sweetie...

Glad you like it!

Thank you...
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Prisoner_Number_Six Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 01:20 AM
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21. My previous comments stand unchanged
Except to say it's even better now.

Sending you a PM in a few.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 01:25 AM
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23. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six...
Thank you, sweetie...

I am so honored!

I did hesitate to further edit it, after what you said before...

But I truly felt that the little change I made did make it stronger...

Thank you...

:hug:

I will be alert to your PM.
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TK421 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 08:16 AM
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24. Awesome Peggy!
that was a bit....steamy! Very well done! :D
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:22 PM
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25. My dear TK 421!
Ah, sweetie...

So glad you enjoyed this!

There's life in the old dame yet...;)


Thank you!
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:24 PM
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26. Oh! You finished it!
:applause:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:30 PM
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27. My dear Haole Girl!
I did finish it! I'll be reading it tomorrow night at the open mic!

Thanks for coming by, sweetie...

Thank you for the applause...

I hope you feel much better today!

:hug:
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:34 PM
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28. Thanks
I feel a little better today. It feels like the cold that never ends, though. :hug:
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BeachBaby Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:38 PM
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29. Wow. Just wow.
Would it be copyright infringement if I were to use this for, uh, something? :hide:

Well done, girl. You're such a talented woman. :hug:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:42 PM
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30. My dear BeachBaby!
Edited on Mon Feb-23-09 12:42 PM by CaliforniaPeggy
I would be honored in the extreme if you were to use this for something! Just with proper attribution...

And thank you!

Your very kind remarks mean a lot to me...

Occasionally the words come out the way I want them to.

:hug:
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3.14158675309 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:48 PM
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31. I'll be on my bunk....
Thank you for the wonderful imagery, CP! :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 12:51 PM
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32. My dear 3.14158675309!
Hehehe...

Thank you for the wonderful compliments!

:hug:
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raptor_rider Donating Member (517 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 07:21 PM
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33. Just had to bump this up
Wonderful poem Peggy. All of the lovers out there can relate to your words.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Mon Feb-23-09 07:38 PM
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34. My dear raptor_rider...
Thank you, sweetie...

For your very kind words, and for the bump...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

And it's my hope that all the lovers who've read this can relate to it too...

:hug:
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