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ccharles000 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-26-09 06:20 AM
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A poem about the dentist.
Edited on Fri Jun-26-09 06:49 AM by ccharles000
Shaking,nervous,fear I arrive

Walking toward doom, I enter

waiting waiting artificial flowers can not ease despair

They call, I follow, I can't escape now

I sit in small demented chair surrounded by devices even Lucifer would fear

I hear him he is coming

I see him the sadist has emerged will I survive

The chair leans back what will become of me

white lights like fiery demons that have come to rip my eyes out

He tells me to open I must obey

A tiny hook enters I want to scream

water filling my mouth am I going to drown

I spit it out, he is done, I am free

before I escape I am told I must come back

pray for me because the next time I may not survive
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I Have A Dream Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-26-09 06:25 AM
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1. I like it; it's very evocative.
The only thing that hit me is that I think that you might mean sadist rather than masochist. (At least, that seems to be the spirit of your poem.)

Good job! :thumbsup:

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ccharles000 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-26-09 06:50 AM
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2. I believe you are right.
I changed it.
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ccharles000 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-26-09 08:00 AM
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3. kick
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MilesColtrane Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-26-09 08:10 AM
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4. I've had so much oral surgery, so many extractions, root canals, crowns, orthodontia,...
Edited on Fri Jun-26-09 08:12 AM by MilesColtrane
...so much drilling and filling, that I now laugh at dentists.

The dentist chair is where I first learned how to consciously have an out of body experience.

If Satan has leagues of dentists in Hell, he'll have to do better than that on me.
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ccharles000 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-26-09 09:37 AM
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5. one more kick
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