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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 08:50 PM
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My newest poem, from my workshop:
“Rainy”

Words in

                 Drops


                   I want to read

                                 But


                                     Down the
                                Glass

                               they go

                                  Even.

                                    Rainy words

Any meaning?



                              Silence


                              Flows



                              down




© MLC
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seaker Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 09:12 PM
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1. Different
I like it and applaud your exploration and growth...:applause: :applause: :applause:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 09:27 PM
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2. My dear seaker!
I'm glad you do!

The assignment was to write on any surface...So I chose a rainy window where the words would be washed away by the drops.

Thank you, sweetie!

:hug:
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Swede Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 09:38 PM
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3. Kinda like building a sand castle before the surf hits.
:toast:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 09:40 PM
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4. You could say that, my dear Swede...
:toast:

:D
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LeftyFingerPop Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 10:05 PM
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5. Very nice Peg...
I've been compelled to read it about 10 times...I like it... :hi:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 10:18 PM
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6. My dear LeftyFingerPop!
TEN times? Wow!

I'm so pleased you like it!

It is highly experimental...

Thanks, sweetie...

:hug:
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LeftyFingerPop Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Thu Oct-08-09 10:20 PM
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7. Yep...I can read something that interests me over and over...
To absorb it...you know what I mean. :hug:
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NYC_SKP Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 12:15 AM
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8. Lovely, and evocative...
evocative of the rainy days coming, and the way thoughts and feelings sort of melt and run and, well, you know.

Wow!

:hug:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 12:18 AM
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9. My dear NYC_SKP!
So pleased you like this!

I wrote it Tuesday night after coming home from the workshop...I was on fire!

The assignment was to write on a surface ...any surface.

You should have seen me struggling today with HTML, for the spacing! NOT fun, lol!

Thanks, sweetie...

:hug:
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asdjrocky Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 12:22 AM
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10. Thank you.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 12:28 AM
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11. You're welcome, my dear asdjrocky...
And I thank you...

:hug:
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abq e streeter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 01:03 AM
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12. really nice, especially the 3 words that end it
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 01:07 AM
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13. My dear abq e streeter...
I wanted to give the impression of water washing the words off the window, as the rain streaked down.

Thank you!
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 07:08 AM
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14. Thank you for still sharing your poems
:-)
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 08:03 AM
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15. My dear Haole Girl!
You're welcome, sweetie!

I always will...

;-)
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Pool Hall Ace Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 01:36 PM
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16. Oh, I love it! I can even
hear the squeak squeak squeak of you writing the words as I am reading them! :D
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Oct-09-09 03:04 PM
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17. My dear Pool Hall Ace!
Wow! This is the thing about poetry...

I can write something, and everyone can see totally different things than I did...

And that's wonderful!

I'm so glad you enjoyed this...

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:
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