My newest poem: Fog
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Fri Jan-08-10 07:54 PM
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it rolls over the hills the street the cars billowing up against the end of day Visibility zero Over my shoulder the sun dances against the sky but it is losing the fog comes on not stopping the landscape disappears nothing looks right I know this street but not tonight the fog has taken it © 2010 MLC
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Fri Jan-08-10 09:41 PM
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Fri Jan-08-10 10:03 PM
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Indeed...the fog last night inspired me... Thanks, sweetie! :hug:
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Fri Jan-08-10 09:43 PM
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2. I really like the last nine lines
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Fri Jan-08-10 10:05 PM
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I thank you... I always find it amazing just how the words emerge. I never know...
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Fri Jan-08-10 10:16 PM
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5. Very nice! I used to live in Rustic Canyon--between Santa Monica and Pacific Palisades--
and you nailed that beach fog! :applause:
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Fri Jan-08-10 10:21 PM
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It must have been fun, living there... I was coming home to my little beach town last night when this fog started rolling in... And the poem is the result. Thank you! :hug:
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9. Actually, it was hubby's house. We moved out of California in '88--three years after we married.
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Fri Jan-08-10 10:48 PM
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We get fog for days, and thick. I never thought of fog this way, cool! I guess that's what poetry is all about... hmmm? Happy New Year, Peg! :party: :hug:
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Fri Jan-08-10 10:59 PM
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We get it for days too, but this is about how it behaves (sometimes) as it arrives... I'm so glad you came by, and even gladder that this showed you something new! Thank you! Happy New Year, sweetie! :hug: :party:
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