I'm going to be brave.... and post a poem...

RevolutionaryActs

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:25 PM
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I'm going to be brave.... and post a poem...

:scared:

I really know nothing about writing poems, so I really have no idea if this is good or not..... it's probably crap. HAHA :)

Anger, angst.
Depression, depredation.
Grim, gloom.

Wanting change, fear has its hold.
Wishing for faith, there is no solace in the truth.
Cries in the dark, for no one to hear.

Brave coward, everyone’s friend.

Saying yes when I should say no.
Saying no when I should say yes.
Never understanding.
Why I do what I do.

Home has changed.
Isolation is what I feel.
Joy has left for now.
Keep it close.

What comes is yet to see.
What goes is never to return.
I see what I want.
It’s not what I get.

Lost in my mind.
Not my own pain.
Quit now.
Resting in shame.
Saving my heart for no one.

The time has come.
Under the sun.
Villain of my head.
Where did I come from, where do I go?

No more of this.
No more of me.
No more of you.

I stow away, waiting for it to change.
Hoping my fear has gone.

I look, I see, I feel.
Strength is with me now.
I wait for the dawning of tomorrow.
For that is a new day.

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JohnKleeb

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:27 PM
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1. Hey thats nice

I havent written one in a while, mine are pretty plain lol.

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RevolutionaryActs

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:30 PM
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3. Thanks Johnny

You big sweety pie. :)

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JohnKleeb

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:36 PM
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7. No problem

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soleft

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:29 PM
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2. I don't really know much about poetry either

But your poem strikes me as very bold strokes of raw emotion, and congrats on taking the chance to post it. Thanks.

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RevolutionaryActs

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:32 PM
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5. It is... I wrote is yesterday when I was feeling low, and pissy

I'm better now though. :)

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hermetic

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:30 PM
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4. Good for you!

Writing poetry is a great and noble thing to do. You expressed things I feel and fear. So it worked! Now fear no more and keep writing.:hug:

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RevolutionaryActs

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Wed Feb-16-05 03:33 PM
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6. Thanks!

I write some, I'm more afraid to post it then anything. hehe ;)
:hug:

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Feathered Fish

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Wed Feb-16-05 07:45 PM
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8. Hey that's good!

I am in awe of people that can share their poetry. I have some serious issues when it comes to sharing writing. I'm glad you're feeling better. :)

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RevolutionaryActs

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Wed Feb-16-05 09:44 PM
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9. Thanks!

I know what you mean about sharing your writing, that's why I said I was being brave! :7

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joeybee12

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Wed Feb-23-05 01:41 PM
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10. I like it--then again, I know even less about poetry that you probably do!

Oh well!:hi:

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RevolutionaryActs

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Wed Feb-23-05 06:39 PM
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11. lol. Thank you.

:hi:

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