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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 09:22 AM
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"Dancing in the Rain" Something I wrote several years ago.
Dancing in the Rain

Born deep in the forest,
far from the prying eyes of mortal men,
a small creature flits ceaselessly
‘round the perilous rack and fen.
It searches for a bit of *Magicke*
to keep it’s Age Olde Race intact,
snooping in the Neverlands,
Stealthy Fugitive from Truth and Fact!
A raptor plummets from the sky,
cruel talons spread…..
Shrill Scream of Pain...
THE ANCIENT TRIBE IS DEAD!
Forest Giants tremble,
they moan this sad refrain, “
We’ll never see their like again,
dancing in the rain...”
BikeWriter
1/29/2000



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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 10:25 AM
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1. Nice
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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 11:29 AM
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2. Thank you, Oneighty. I see you're a Korean Vet.
Welcome home and thank you for your service to America. I took a tour of VietNam back in 1967 and 1968.
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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 11:48 AM
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3. Ah!
I went to Korea spring 52. 1968 I was invited back into the Navy. "No, no." I say to the recruiters.

What service? There are a lot of Vietnam Vets in DU.

Welcome home to you.

Do you write a lot of poetry?

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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 12:08 PM
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4. I have one other I'll post here, Oneighty
I was Air Force, and stationed at Pleiku, Air Base. These two are the only poems I've written that I value. I do have about a quarter of a million words written in three fiction books. One is a western, another is a semi-biographical book about outlaw bikers, and the third is a sword and sorceror sort of thing.


A tale of a life at sea.

T'was fifty years ago or more,
young lad stood on fog-shrouded shore,
and shivered as ghostly sails slid past,
draped limply from tall, phantom masts.
Fearsome crewboat ran ashore,
boney fingers 'round worn, water-logged oars.
T'were Satan, himself, at the helm,
beckoned me to board.
Tis' many a hellish sight I've seen,
from Spanish Main to England green,
Old man now, worn and gray,
I come ashore, ne'er again to stray.
BikeWriter

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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 01:03 PM
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5. A sailor, as I was
can wrap their thoughts about that.

Your books. Are they published? I have a collection of life stories, poems and such in a self published book- 230,000 words or so. (Words) tells me so. And that many more stuffed in boxes here and there.

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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Jan-04-05 04:33 PM
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6. No, I haven't published anything as yet.
A fellow veteran who was publishing a small local paper and the Texas State Vietnam Veteran's paper put one of the tamer chapters of my biker book in the state paper for me. That's the only section that has seen light of day, except for portions of it I've let people read to critique. I've considered self-publishing that one book. I think it would sell at bike shops and runs. Until I can do something like that I'm still editing.
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JitterbugPerfume Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-07-05 07:48 PM
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7. your poems are
beautiful

(180 told me I should read them--as usual he was right)
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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-14-05 09:11 AM
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8. Why, thank you, Jitterbug! I'd written those quite a while ago.
They were a change from my usual fiction. :)
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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Sep-27-06 02:02 PM
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10. I had to come read 180's kind words again.
:(
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BikeWriter Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-14-05 10:33 AM
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9. Thank you for refering readers my way, my Friend.
:)
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